if there's anyone still alive on this site.. ;P
could you maybe give my almost finished app a glance over?
or shred it apart.. whatever suits your fancy.

http://www.neopets.com/~Yilati

Awesome layout. That is half the battle.

"and that hideous image above will be replaced asap."
No self degradation.

"Notes to self;"
I would remove this section before turning in the app. Durdur

"About Tiger"
Finish, of course. ;)

"I'm sarahqzq [period] I guess it's"

"Woot Tim Horton's!"
???

"highschool, so excited! and am university"
Add ( ) around so excited!

"for neopets [period] so please don't "

"year, which means"
No comma

"hoorah"
Capitalize


Urfff. D: Commas are not periods and do not need to be used so liberally. Also, several sentences need caps. Too many emoticons.

"I just read that over..."
So you were or were not going to trade? I am confuwze.

"Not to be flattering or anything."
Lol, get rid of this sentence.

"someone wrote me of a plush draik"
Someone made you the story for your application?

Your paragraph structuring hurt my brain. @-@

/patpat

thank you so much!
i konw.. i have awful paragraph and sentence structure. :C
ill make those changes asap, thank you so much!

edit; oh, and they wrote the story as like.. fanart. I didn't use it on the app C:

Aw cool :)
I'm going to apply too ~

nooo! ;PP
im terrified of competition xDD