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Title: My First App
Description: please help! i really want this pet!

mamaxbear - January 29, 2011 01:54 AM (GMT)
you can void this topic! or it can be deleted.. thank you!

mamaxbear - January 29, 2011 05:08 AM (GMT)
can someone please help me?

fleurdust - January 29, 2011 08:57 AM (GMT)
Oh dear, it looks like he's been taken down from adoption D:
Nonetheless I'll give you a few comments and perhaps it can help you with your next adoption process ^^

On the whole your application is quite sweet and honest. However I found it difficult to really get a good sense of who you are. I mean I know your name, but not much else - perhaps talk briefly about your hobbies (on-Neo and off-Neo) or the sort of person you are so that the foster really feels they 'know' you : )

Something it's also important to remember with this sort of application, is that there is likely to be quite a good deal of competition - he's an expensive pet with some nice stats. On Neopets, in the 'application world', things like art, writing, and characterisation tend to be prized over simply saying you'll feed and play with the pet and cure him when he's sick. It depends entirely on the person deciding, of course - this is just the general way of things. Because of this it often really helps if you can include a bit more detail (such as a bit of a story, for example) about the pet's 'life' with you.

I also felt somewhat that although you mentioned his BD skills, they were just in passing - as if it was an afterthought, when I think that's quite an integral part of this pet.

Saying 'I'm not very good at ...' in my opinion is never a good idea. No one was good at these things to start with and the way I see it, an application gives you real opportunity to improve your skills and practise! You don't have to make your own layout if you like - many people will be able to suggest lovely premades you could use - and it will provide you with a lot more space to be creative, which is often something people love to see in apps : )

Very sorry that he's been taken down; but good luck in your future applications! :*

mamaxbear - January 29, 2011 08:24 PM (GMT)
thanks!!.. and its okay i'll find another one i hope.

mamaxbear - January 29, 2011 08:46 PM (GMT)
wait how do you find out its not adoptable anymore? because he's still on the adoption page on

fleurdust - January 29, 2011 09:06 PM (GMT)
It's on the info page for the pets :) - here ^^

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