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Hey! Glad to see you joining, just a few things that need to be fixed before we can accept.
First, the personality. It's kind of half and half with where it should be. A good portion of it is talking about more... what he's done than who he is as a person, you know? Those things are in your history - you don't necessarily need to repeat them so much in your personality.
Second would be the history. You have it in 4 little bullets, but their not exactly bullet points. A bullet point is just very brief, not even necessarily a sentence, and you essentially just have them in paragraphs. The first one alone, you could turn into lots of points.
Just as a general note - check out your spelling throughout the app. Especially with some of the names. I'd double check some of it for grammar things, too.
Finally, your sample. It's good, but, it's not very focused on Mikael's thoughts - more just the actions. He did this, this was that, etc. You don't really see any of Mikael's thoughts or how he feels about certain things while they're going on. I think that there's definitely some room for expansion in there.
Thanks, and let me know when you've fixed it!
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