'Ohana Means Family

This is in Stitch's POV and is a sequel to l and s 2.
Chapter 1.
Lilo and I were riding in the forest in the hover craft when something we didn't expect happened. Someone saw us. We pulled to a stop and after an unspoken agreement and nod landed. "You're probley wondering what's going on." Lilo said. "Stitch is an alien." "You mean he's from another country." The girl (wh had spotted us.) said with an accent. I"Planet." I said. "I'm Lilo." Lilo said. the girl stuck out her hand in greeting. "Lilly Potter."
Chapter 2.
2 years later The girl and her Ohana ha djust moved to the island. We were visiting her house when I tripped over something. "Has anyone seen my book?"someone called. "Under my dog's feet!" Lilo called back. "Where are they.?
the person said. 'In the kictchen!/" she replied. (copied from a babysitter's club book.) a moment later the source of the voice came and I handed it to him. "Thanks. He said. Just then we heard a crash. We went outsdide to see what it was. In the door of a speceship were 2 aliens that looked like me in dog form except one was plum and lilic and hade green eyes. And the other... "I'd know that hook nose anywhere." said the person who I had handed the book to. Then added "Mixed blood. My second look alike nodded and said "DNA combonation." The person turened to the other alien and pointing to the one next to her' said "He helped us win."
chapter 3.
Another year later we were at Lilly's dad's birthday party in the backyard when a SPACESHIP Lnded. An alien with 4 legs came out. "Hello there. You must be Stitch." It said. 'Actually... I must be goingg." I said grabing Lilo and gettting ready to make a run for it with th erest of them. (copied fro Stuart Little)
The alien pressed a buttpon a button on a remote and a glass dome went over us SAs soon as that happened there was a flash of yellow light and we were suddenly on anoher planet.
Okietakka." I said. "Megga think aliens who live here have little or nagge ships." so we have to find stuiff to make one.Lilo and I walked off. "Easy for someone with superstrenght to say." I head Lilly's uncle mutter." (copied from a book series calle d replica) Later at niight in a forestLilly's dad look at a pile of sticks we had gathered. Suddenly flames burst fro it. "What did you do?' Lilo asked. He looked at her. I made a fire." (copied from Eragon.)
So. What do you guys think so far?