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Toph4er
Posted: Feb 27 2008, 11:12 PM


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Well I had to write a poem for class, so after several hours I have:

Wishful Dreaming

A sentence, a snore
The cadence, a bore
When sleeping does wake
Can meaning retake
The absence of thought
For that sense he sought?
In good chance he might
This nuisance will fight
And let go fin’ly
Of narcolepsy
But just then a fright
Another bad night

Now, maybe you can find significance in it...I spent most of my time looking for rhyming words that fit the pattern lol.

Chris"Toph4er"

Changed be rid to let go, my teacher suggested I leave the pattern broken in the last couplet since the focus changes from the dream where he has no narcolepsy to suddenly waking and realizing that it was just that, only a dream, and the break draws attention to that.
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Posted: Feb 28 2008, 12:58 AM


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Were you required to rhyme? Almost everybody is against rhyme nowadays. I thought I was the only one left on this planet who likes rhyming poetry. If you need help rhyming go to rhymezone.com.
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Toph4er
Posted: Feb 28 2008, 08:39 PM


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No, but it's my choice to rhyme because rhyming and pattern help it flow. Most poetry nowadays just looks like a paragraph broken up every few words tongue.gif
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Posted: Feb 29 2008, 11:14 PM


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I know what you mean. Most poetry nowadays looks and sounds like a bunch of meaningless random words somebody pulled out of a hat!
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Posted: Mar 30 2008, 05:00 PM


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I'm happy to say that my poem will likely be published in an upcoming Narcolepsy Network newsletter, if only I was a subscriber...I've never had time to go through the process!

Keep an eye out for it,
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Posted: Mar 30 2008, 09:50 PM


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I've been working on another poem about N. I'll post it when I finish it.
I can't wait to see yours published!
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Posted: Apr 2 2008, 04:10 AM


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Toph4er- I think you are quite talented. wink.gif

I like to write poetry-but have to be in the mood for it.
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Toph4er
Posted: Apr 2 2008, 09:41 PM


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Thanks, but thats probably the first and last poem I'll ever write tongue.gif
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Posted: May 17 2008, 11:20 PM


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Woot, it is set to be published! laugh.gif

Both Creative Communication and the International Library of Poetry (Poetry.com) have sent me letters in the last few days asking me to publish it with them biggrin.gif. (Yes, I submitted it, it's not a completely random occurrence rolleyes.gif). I suppose it was worth the hours of pain to write it then tongue.gif.

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Posted: May 19 2008, 08:15 PM


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I'm not familiar with Creative Communication, but Poetry. com is a scam, so beware.
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Toph4er
Posted: May 19 2008, 09:26 PM


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I'm not buyin their book anyways, but thanks for the heads up. What exactly do you mean by scam?
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Posted: May 21 2008, 06:42 PM


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go to:

http://www.winningwriters.com/contests/avoid/av_avoid.php

or

http://windpub.com/literary.scams/abc-nlp.htm


If it hadn't been for a friend of mine seeing an expose' on Oprah, they would have had me fooled. Thank goodness she blew the whistle on them before I was out any money! I didn't even know there was any such thing as a poetry contest until they placed an ad in our small town newspaper. So, with some urging from my family, I sent them an entry. The rest is history!
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Posted: May 22 2008, 10:17 AM


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interesting, like I said i didn't want to buy their 50+ dollar book anyways. oh yea, and they say it takes 12-18 months to acctually publish it rolleyes.gif

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Posted: May 22 2008, 10:01 PM


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I'd like to see you submit your poem to some reputable contests. You might even wind up with your own book! wink.gif
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Posted: May 23 2008, 08:26 AM


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Well CC is legit and I dont remember where else I sent it in to
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