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|Posted by: Ryuuji-San Apr 3 2011, 04:04 PM|
[Alias:] Arashi no Ryuuji 嵐の龍 | "Ryuuji Of The Storm"
[Village:] Kumogakure no Sato 雲隠れの里
[Country:] Kaminari no Kuni 雷の国
[Storm Release] [Lightning Release]
[Character Height:] 5'0ft
[Characters Weight:] 135lbs
[Character Appearance:] Ryuuji is a boy with a fairly short and skinny body, perfectly built for speedy and agile maneuvers. Though skinny he is not without muscles, the result of years of intense training for his profession as a shinobi. With a physique like his, one which would cause even the gods to envy him, it is known that Ryuuji has noble blood flowing in his veins. Physically Ryuujii's body is at tip-top shape, almost flawless for his body-frame and age. In other words it's a well toned physique befitting of a respectable shinobi. This shinobi's posture is perfect and gives him a noble air which is further cemented with every carefully measured step, every efficient motion, and every proud stance. The way he presents himself is found as a stunning quality. Standing tall and proud, head held high, shoulders back, and with a walk that commands your respect and your attention. The boy's skin is just as shady as his attitude.
Many have seen the piercing blue eyes born onto young Genin. Eyes are a steely, reassuring light blue color. These eyes hold a great deal of calmness in them, always seeming to be analyzing, calculating, absorbing and then evaluating the things that happen around him. The deep eyes seem to go on forever, and his stare appears to see through everything and even into the hearts of people. His piercing eyes are unwavering in their gaze, constantly watching with all the precision of a hawk.
The Genin's face is very noble. He has a youthful face and is considered quite the catch amongst the young Kunoichi of the village. One of the unique qualities of Ryuuji's physical appearance that is said to entice a person (male or female), is his smile. Many describe it as a one of those rare smiles, one that holds a quality of eternal reassurance in it. It seems to face the whole external world for an instant, and then, concentrates itself on that very person with an irresistible prejudice in the favor of them. A smile that understood a person just so far as they wanted to be understood, believed in them as they would like to believe in themselves, and assured them that it had precisely the impression that they, at their best, hoped to express. Smile that is capable of making the girls swoon
[Personality:] Ryuuji is generally a laid-back, jovial fellow, although he can be dead serious when the situation warrants it. Despite his carefree attitude, his speech is always polite, though it is sometimes sarcastic. Ryuuji has the demeanor and wisdom of a man far older than himself, due to his prolific lineage and mantle of station as a respected ninja. His exploits have given him an attitude far removed from most others, and he understands things in more abstract and philosophical terms. He adopts a tranquil nature, much akin to water; free flowing most of the time, but unforgiving and crushing when aroused.
Ryuuji has a rather solitary and matter-of-fact attitude. Despite his increasingly growing reputation and prowess as a ninja, Ryuuji has shown no signs of arrogance, and is rather modest about his abilities. When suggested by many for him to be part of an advanced Genin squadron, Ryuuji admitted that such a position was unfit for him. His naturally calm attitude is used to his advantage in battle, as it becomes easier for him to maintain his composure to stay focused on the situation at hand, and ultimately notice everything around him. As a result, he can quickly adjust to any situation to make keen and thought-out decisions, allowing him to stay steps ahead of his opponents.
[History:] Born right into a well-respected family outside the village of the clouds, Ryuuji still had not been permitted for a glamorous childhood. The incentive behind his birth was just for experimental reasons. Both his mother and father were quite shameful for part-taking in this unlawful act but they promised the great professor, Tokusen Namato that they will allow their first born child to be experimented with.
So in secrecy, when Ryuuji was born and fresh out the womb he was sent to Namato's lab immediately. There he had a ritual prepared for the newborn child. He placed Ryuuji at the center of his lab and began performing a string of handseals, when he was finished his right arm had transformed into a black dragon with hollow yellow eyes. The dragon rushed towards Ryuuji and fused quickly with his body, leaving a tattoo behind. Namato was rather fatigued from the jutsu but his eyes remained glued on the hollering child. A sharp grin appeared on the professor's face as he witness his experiment being a success.
Ever since that day, young Ryuuji's body ached and he had not a clue why. He asked his parents why he had a tattoo of a dragon and they lied and told him it was his birth mark. The pain started to settle down when he reached 10 years of age and that's when Namato decided to enter the young boy's life once again.
Namato acted like a personal sensei for Ryuuji, he taught him many things about both life and jutsu. When the time came for entering the Academy, Ryuuji would be more than prepared. Before he had been enrolled into the Academy, Namato placed another seal on him and told him that it would suppress his body pain.
Ryuuji's time at the academy was relatively easy and amusing. He made a handful of friends and started to learn more about himself. He figured out that the tattoo on his body wasn't a birthmark but more so a cursed seal. Of course he didn't let it be known to the public because he didn't want everyone to see him as some monster.
When the exams came about Ryuuji passed it with very little trouble, his written exam was probably the only thing that hadn't been done flawlessly.
[Jutsu & Techniques]
Ranton: Reiza Sakasu (Storm Release: Encouraging Crushing Chain Tormenting Principle)
Description: The user creates several bright beams and shoots them at the enemy. A halo of bright energy spreads from the user's hands as this technique is activated. The beams are able to alter their direction after being shot, making it possible to strike multiple enemies with pinpoint accuracy, even bypassing hostages held in close proximity. The user can increase the number of missiles to a great amount to pin down an enemy.
Raiton: Kangekiha (Lightning Release: Wave of Inspiration)
Description: The user generates a large amount of electricity in their hands, which can then be released into conductive materials to electrocute their foes. However, a lightning technique of equal power can neutralize it
Bunshin no Jutsu (Clone Technique)
Rank: E (Basic)
Description: This technique must be mastered by any ninja who has
graduated from the shinobi academy. It's the most basic technique a
Genin must know, since it can be a real lifesaver. This ninjutsu
creates a simple illusion clone identical to the caster. The clone
however has no physical properties and will disperse the moment it is
Henge no Jutsu (Transformation Technique)
Description: Henge no Jutsu is the basic skill a ninja must know to become a Genin. It is a very useful and widely used skill in the series, as it has many uses. It's mostly used as a decoy, to confuse the opponent by transforming into somebody that's an ally with the enemy.
Genjutsu Kai (Genjutsu Release)
Description: A Ninjutsu technique where the ninja focuses their chakra and screams "kai" or "release." They can perform it on themselves or on others. It will effectively ward off most Genjutsu, unless extremely powerful or when used in conjunction with an advanced bloodline
Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Replacement Technique)
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themself with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.
Shunshin no Jutsu (Body Flicker Technique)
Description: This jutsu is a high-speed movement technique, allowing a ninja to move short to long distances at an almost untraceable speed. To an observer, it appears as if the user has teleported. A puff of smoke is occasionally used to disguise the user's movements. It is accomplished by using chakra to temporarily vitalise the body and move at extreme speeds. The amount of chakra required depends on the overall distance and elevation between the user and their intended destination.
[5x] Kunai - This throwing knife is one of the common weapons of a ninja. It is often kept in a holster on the leg in a pouch attached to the belt. The Kunai can be used in conjunction with explosive tags and other weapons to form deadly combos
[10x] Shuriken - Another common weapon, the shuriken is often kept in a holster on the leg or in a pouch attached to the belt.
|Posted by: Haraki Apr 3 2011, 06:53 PM|
| First off, your character detail and history depth are really amazing. However, there are some concerns with your over all application.
TO start, to have any kind of jutsu, you have to have a jutsu tree based around those skills. For example, your Raiton skills would be here:
The way a jutsu tree you work your way through as your ninja progresses.
So if you wish for your storm chart to be used, you must submit it and have Admin approval before use. Genin are also only allowed 1 jutsu tree plus the Academy chart, you would have 2.
The second concern is that Genin are only allowed one chakra nature, Jounin and up are only allowed 2. So (suggestion) if you want to have your character completed right away, you should stick to the Raiton chart. Just make these minor corrections and you will be all good to go!
EDIT: Also, after reading it through a couple of times, I noticed that your character seems like he's a bit over powered, after all he's just a Genin, and nobody is perfect (Especially Genin).
Another thing I caught the second time around was that in his history in mentions the "famous clan of lightning" but we aren't allowing clans or bloodlines currently in the RP. However, when we do you are welcome to submit your clan for admin approval.
What I say stands though, your application detail is impressive, just tone down the character, remove the clan ties, and fix the jutsu issues, and we'll be good to go.
|Posted by: Ryuuji-San Apr 12 2011, 05:56 PM|
|I'll submit a storm chart but the release requires manipulation of elements suiton and raiton. I'll remove the clan ties though and whatever else you want|
|Posted by: Haraki Apr 12 2011, 07:12 PM|
| Alright great! and as soon as we approve the storm chart, you remove the clan ties, and make your genin character not so perfect, we'll be good to go. He's meant to stumble over things, he's 12, and fresh out of the academy. Mistakes will happen. Not to mention I doubt a 12 year old would have a godly physique
Other than that, we'll be good to go!
|Posted by: Ryuuji-San Apr 19 2011, 02:35 PM|
|Hmm TBH. I don't know if I'm really feeling this character anymore.|
|Posted by: Haraki Apr 19 2011, 04:36 PM|
|Well alright, I personally look forward to getting you a submitted character, if you need any tips or tricks for getting a quick acceptance, let me know.|
|Posted by: Ryuuji-San Apr 19 2011, 07:02 PM|
|I'm not a big fan of the cloud or rock village so the shinobi I have created for those villages are medicore. I stuck parts of my leaf & my mist shinobi together to make this char and I don't really like how it turned out.|
|Posted by: Haraki Apr 20 2011, 12:21 AM|
|Well we went with cloud for that very purpose, to inspire creativity! They are such under explored villages, we thought it would be a great place to start. This cloud village is based off our own design, so while you don't like the Cloud Village in Naruto, you might really enjoy ours. If this is a character based off several, you can really hone in and make one that's easily accepted! If you want to discuss characters with me, feel free to drop me a PM.|