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Double Minded
By Ethan Foshay


Two boys born on that day
One was healthy and the other dead
Causing the mother a lot sorrow
One without a brain in his head

The first boy grew like no other
He was loving, gentle, and he was kind
But this boy had his problems
This boy heard a voice in his mind

As he grew older the voice grew stronger
It grew louder than he could take
It grew louder than he could bear
And his mind began to break

The voice began to scream
It wanted to be let out
It said that it was trapped
Trapped inside this The Underworld

The boy wanted answers
All the answers that he could find
Then the boy found out the truth
That he was born with a double mind

He went to a lab
Where they tested on his brain
And the doctors had confirmed
That the boy was not insane

On that day that he was born
And they found his brother dead
What they never had found out
The boy had two brains inside his head

Though he had found out
That he was not insane
He had also found out
That the voice would not go away

The voice was louder than before
Screaming at his brother to set him free
But the boy was powerless
He could not fulfill his brother’s needs

Because he felt so helpless
He committed suicide
And there, in a pool of blood
Is where his body lies

[Swiftflame]

I just have to say, your style of finding original ideas to put into stories is excellent. I love it.

No spelling or word errors as far as I could see. I had little problem with reading the meter of the story. And I enjoyed it.

Thanks for posting. :)

[EthanBoyTLDW]

thank you very much :) it's nice to get positive feedback