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 CBUB or FPL ideas, this is criticism corner
ND4
Posted: Jan 10 2009, 09:54 PM


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QUOTE (Bloody_Freak @ Jan 10 2009, 09:16 PM)
QUOTE (ND4 @ Jan 10 2009, 04:55 PM)
As far I can see .There is nothing wrong.
  Oh and Luigi aint gonna make it.But Mario will .

Thanks man. happy.gif

Hey Blod since Trech reivwed it.Could you review my Roy match?
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treacherous
Posted: Jan 10 2009, 09:55 PM


Let Hammy have his Bison. I've got Zod.


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QUOTE (ND4 @ Jan 10 2009, 09:53 PM)
QUOTE (treacherous @ Jan 10 2009, 09:52 PM)
An hour ago.  It has taken me that long to read the first paragraph.  tongue.gif

ND4, you don't have to copy the WHOLE story to tell him.  "It's okay."  happy.gif  Silly ND4.

What!??! It took you that long?! Dude I am a speed reader. I even read better then Collage kids.I can read a whole dictornary in 21 mintunes.

I can take a dump in 20 minutes.


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QUOTE (SilverSurfer092 @ Apr 9 2009, 03:27 AM)
WTFYES  Treacherous is full of pwnage.
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Bloody_Freak
Posted: Jan 10 2009, 11:19 PM


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QUOTE (treacherous @ Jan 10 2009, 05:52 PM)
An hour ago. It has taken me that long to read the first paragraph. tongue.gif

ND4, you don't have to copy the WHOLE story to tell him. "It's okay." happy.gif Silly ND4.

lol. Come on. You didn't finish it yet?


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treacherous
Posted: Jan 10 2009, 11:54 PM


Let Hammy have his Bison. I've got Zod.


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Wow. That was really good. Epicness. It's so sad. So much death. Everybodys getting stabbed in the chest. There are little spelling errors and this and that, but it doesn't distract from the story. Very impressive Bloody. Very impressive. Who cares about the length really. It's good. Post it.

It is sort of like a battle for the video game universe. Mario's Kingdom is caput if Ganon can do all of that to the Zelda world. I don't know who half these characters are, but you seem to really know them well. I like it. Continue it. Post it. Go Bloody.


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QUOTE (SilverSurfer092 @ Apr 9 2009, 03:27 AM)
WTFYES  Treacherous is full of pwnage.
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Bloody_Freak
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 12:32 AM


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QUOTE (treacherous @ Jan 10 2009, 07:54 PM)
Wow. That was really good. Epicness. It's so sad. So much death. Everybodys getting stabbed in the chest. There are little spelling errors and this and that, but it doesn't distract from the story. Very impressive Bloody. Very impressive. Who cares about the length really. It's good. Post it.

It is sort of like a battle for the video game universe. Mario's Kingdom is caput if Ganon can do all of that to the Zelda world. I don't know who half these characters are, but you seem to really know them well. I like it. Continue it. Post it. Go Bloody.

Awesome! Thanks man! No blatant errors I should fix before posting? huh.gif


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treacherous
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 12:43 AM


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Nothing major. A few spelling errors, but nothing that is so bothersome it makes my eyes bleed.


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QUOTE (SilverSurfer092 @ Apr 9 2009, 03:27 AM)
WTFYES  Treacherous is full of pwnage.
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Bloody_Freak
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 12:45 AM


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QUOTE (treacherous @ Jan 10 2009, 08:43 PM)
Nothing major. A few spelling errors, but nothing that is so bothersome it makes my eyes bleed.

No spelling errors come up on word, but I think that's cuz I used words like "seemed" instead of "seeped"..... Dang.... I don't wanna read all that.... >.<

Guess I'll post as is... Hopefully Grano will be back in time to catch it.


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Bloody_Freak
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 12:52 AM


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Wait, you said something about the paragraphs? huh.gif


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treacherous
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 12:53 AM


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Hey, you're right? Did you go back in and fix it? Hmph. Maybe it was all those crazy names: Impas, Koopas, Gonads, Goomba, Hoopas. I don't know those guys. I say post it. I did a Word check. Flawless Victory.


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QUOTE (SilverSurfer092 @ Apr 9 2009, 03:27 AM)
WTFYES  Treacherous is full of pwnage.
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Bloody_Freak
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 12:56 AM


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QUOTE (treacherous @ Jan 10 2009, 08:53 PM)
Hey, you're right? Did you go back in and fix it? Hmph. Maybe it was all those crazy names: Impas, Koopas, Gonads, Goomba, Hoopas. I don't know those guys. I say post it. I did a Word check. Flawless Victory.

Awesome! Hopefully a few people will read it.


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ND4
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 01:24 AM


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QUOTE (treacherous @ Jan 10 2009, 11:54 PM)
Wow. That was really good. Epicness. It's so sad. So much death. Everybodys getting stabbed in the chest. There are little spelling errors and this and that, but it doesn't distract from the story. Very impressive Bloody. Very impressive. Who cares about the length really. It's good. Post it.

It is sort of like a battle for the video game universe. Mario's Kingdom is caput if Ganon can do all of that to the Zelda world. I don't know who half these characters are, but you seem to really know them well. I like it. Continue it. Post it. Go Bloody.

Um Trech I have a another CBUB match that I want you to look at .

Noob and Smoke vs Sub Zero.


Sub Zero had been chased by Scorpion long enough. The Lin Kwei Grandmaster found Scorpion and challenged him to a final Mortal Kombat. Scorp started the match with a fireball which Sz ducked under.Sub Zero then froze Scorpion's feet .
Scorp noticed this and put his right hand around the hilt of his hell sword the Mugai Ruy and waited fro Sz. Sz then slid down to break Scorp's feet off.

Scorp then glared and Sz then thought he saw a little speck of remorse in the Specter's cold white eyes. But the Specter didn't care that he felt a little remorse.
"Get over here!" The specter yelled as his trademark spear punctured the armor and flesh of Sz.

Sz then tried freezing the spear and Scorpion .But the specter had seen Sz use this maneuver before so he brought his spear 1 second before Sz was gonna freeze it . The Grandmaster of the Lin Kwei then fell to his knees .Coughing blood into his mask and holding his spear wound.

Scorpion walked over the fallen grandmaster and spoke .
" Lin Kwei I am Scorpion and you killed me in cold blood.You also slaughtered my clan . But I shall get my revenge. Sz had enough .If he was gonna die he wouldn't die alone. With that Sz reached for his Kori blade .Scorpion saw this and picked up his blade .Swish!! "Aahhahhaha" Were the only sounds the now dieing Lin Kwei made after Scorpion had used his Mugai Ruy to slice his arm off.


Scorpion:'Goodbye Lin Kwei .For good!" Snap!! Went Sub Zero's neck as the specter snapped it in two. The body fell to the ground with a thud.
Scorpion:"Hmm. No it cant be .He is not the one. Noooo!! " The Specter yelled having killed the wrong person. Meanwhile in the Netherealm the recently decreased Sub Zero had came to. Sz then got to his feet but was too busy on focusing on where he was to notice a dark figure sneak up behind him.


Bammm! The dark figure had just given one swift blow to the back of Sz's neck .
Which rendered the now decreased former Lin Kwei grandmaster uncounsious.
Two hours later ....
Sz had awoke to being hovered over a pit of spikes. "What is the meaning of this!?" The dark figure which knocked Sz uncounsious then walked up from the shadows. Sz gasped at who the figure was or used to be . " Smoke .I It cant be."
Then soon after Sz had said that a dark voice then spoke up from the background.
"Hahhaha. It is or used to be your fellow Lin Kwei Smoke."
Then it was found out that the dark voice belonged to the Wraith Noob Saibot who also used to be the former Sub Zero before his death.

Sz took that it was hard to accept that the cyborg was indeed his old friend Smoke. But he just couldn't believe that his older brother had become a wraith.
"Brother what has happened to you after your death?!"
Noob:"Brother?I have no brother for I am Noob Saibot!"
Sz sighed at the ego his older brother had got when he had descended into the Netherealm.


" So what do you plan on doing brother?" Noob simply chuckled and responded to his little brother." Sigh. Are you that simple Lin Kwie? Your going to die !"
Sz's eyes got big at this comment and then noticed he had frozen the ropes that tied his arm together.But he had to keep his brother talking so he wouldn't notice.
"Brother why?" Noob just laughed again and brought out a practice dummy made out of remains of past fights. Noob:"To earn a rep in the Netherealm fool."
Noob then disappeared for a quick second and then the dummy's head fell to the floor .Noob then reappeared. Sz had seen enough .He wanted to leave at once.He broke the ropes and kicked his former big brother to the ground .
Noob :"Grrr. Smoke! Assist me in slaying him!"


The cyborg had no choice but to obey.Sz was saddened by this and brought out his Kori Blade and got ready for the fight of his well afterlife. Noob then got into his Monkey fighting stance which greatly freaked out his brother. Noob must have saw this because he barked this at Sub Zero. "Do not look at him that way peasant!!"
With that Noob and Smoke who first sighed and charged with his master.

Sz then charged as well. Okay it is Noob and Smoke vs Sub Zero on the Falling Cliff area were the combatants can fall of and get impaled on spikes.

Who wins?Rate.Comment.Oh and most important of all enjoy!
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Bloody_Freak
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 01:31 AM


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WTF!? I posted it and it looks awful! There's icons with a ? in place of - and ™ instead of '.... F@%k!


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Posted: Jan 11 2009, 02:01 AM


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Stop making matches! The old matches aren't moving!


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ND4
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 02:08 AM


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QUOTE (darkender @ Jan 11 2009, 02:01 AM)
Stop making matches! The old matches aren't moving!

What?
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Bloody_Freak
Posted: Jan 11 2009, 02:11 AM


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QUOTE (darkender @ Jan 10 2009, 10:01 PM)
Stop making matches! The old matches aren't moving!

I noticed that too. Why is that?


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