Description: my comics
carlantis25 - July 13, 2009 09:32 AM (GMT)
ok number one
darkray - July 13, 2009 09:58 AM (GMT)
i don't get it? who's the good side and whos the bad side?
carlantis25 - July 13, 2009 12:07 PM (GMT)
Denning Rosewater - July 14, 2009 01:30 AM (GMT)
carlantis25 - July 22, 2009 10:44 AM (GMT)
@dening:it isn't awful its just the begining
@Darkray: mabey this will help
Isaac55 - July 23, 2009 02:17 AM (GMT)
Not bad... The actual comics need to tell the story though, not those character descriptions.
carlantis25 - July 23, 2009 10:23 AM (GMT)
Isaac i know im getting into more depth with it now
Isaac55 - July 23, 2009 08:11 PM (GMT)
Still not quite getting it. I would put narration in there somewhere. Sorry I didn't mention that earlier.
carlantis25 - July 23, 2009 09:00 PM (GMT)
listen isaac this is a complex story that where the present will interloop with the past which in turn will interloop with the future
Isaac55 - July 23, 2009 10:00 PM (GMT)
As long as it makes sense, then it is fine. As of now, I am not seeing any plot or any sort of story right now.
That's all I'm trying to say. You don't have to listen to me if you don't want to.
oranj - July 24, 2009 12:06 AM (GMT)
|QUOTE (carlantis25 @ Jul 23 2009, 02:00 PM)|
| listen isaac this is a complex story that where the present will interloop with the past which in turn will interloop with the future |
I don't know whether to flame or laugh
Dark Overlord Zack - July 24, 2009 06:46 AM (GMT)
It's a bit hard to follow
|this is a complex story that where the present will interloop with the past which in turn will interloop with the future|
reaction image time
carlantis25 - July 28, 2009 11:04 AM (GMT)
Exxucus - July 28, 2009 06:12 PM (GMT)
Although it makes a bit of sense there are quite a few things that this comic should have explained, but did not.
Why is the red team trying to kill the White Lions?
Why does that Assassin want Carl's sword?
How does Carl shoot freaking LAZOR BEAMS!?
And why are the White Lions attacking a castle? It takes more than a handful of soldiers to take a castle, too, BTW.
The comic doesn't really have any sense of flow or story. It's just... things happening and hardly being explained.
carlantis25 - July 29, 2009 10:42 AM (GMT)
this should clear things up
Vurn - July 30, 2009 02:21 AM (GMT)
Ok, now it's clearing up a bit.
carlantis25 - July 30, 2009 11:02 AM (GMT)
darkray - July 30, 2009 11:56 PM (GMT)
okay it's starting to get better
carlantis25 - July 31, 2009 07:28 PM (GMT)
and the story advances i need a custom sheet for lord Xekfer can any one contribute a king class sprite sheet
blizzard-blast7 - August 3, 2009 09:40 AM (GMT)
the story is evolving and although none of the characters have names except you whats up with that
carlantis25 - August 3, 2009 09:43 AM (GMT)
Exxucus - August 3, 2009 07:43 PM (GMT)
WHAT? WHAT? PUMPKIN WHAT?
I'm totally lost. What was the Wyvern doing?
Why is Bramimmond suddenly a mamkute?
Why is Idoun suddenly not a mamkute?
Why is everyone's dialogue so flat and lifeless?
Why are you trying to convey a complex (and I use that term lightly) story in a comic strip, something better suited for "ba-dum-tish" puns?
EDIT: Looking back the very end did have a bit of the good old stupid humor, so don't take my comments pertaining to that too seriously.
Dark Overlord Zack - August 3, 2009 08:58 PM (GMT)
not to be rude but this was funny.
GOD DAMN MAN, YOU ALREADY ATE ROY PISS OFF
carlantis25 - August 4, 2009 03:07 PM (GMT)
ok now my comics will resume but im facing some problems I need a sprite for lord Xekfer and also i need more characters any one want to contribute lord xekfer needs a battle sheet and any character contributions need a battle sheet and a mug. if any one has a contribution send it to me at Carlwilliams2525@yahoo.com
oranj - August 4, 2009 06:31 PM (GMT)
|QUOTE (Dark Overlord Zack @ Aug 3 2009, 01:58 PM)|
| not to be rude but this was funny.|
GOD DAMN MAN, YOU ALREADY ATE ROY PISS OFF
I'm glad I'm not the only person who though so <_<
Renegade - August 5, 2009 12:51 AM (GMT)
Okay, I've been a real storyline Nazi back in my RPG game making days, and this is by far the worst story I've encountered.
first off, what is the storyline? At least post a summary of what is happening and what will happen further on. I've picked up nothing except some horribly-rendered blood and some decent sprites going at it in random boughts of bloodshed.
Second, I think either Zeph or Exxy stated this, but the dialogue is too, well, horrid. The wording make me want to stab my cat in the stomach, while the sub-par grammar make me want to go even further and murder myself.
Also, only a few people have names. nobody else has been introduced.
The structure is killing my eyes. There's no narration or captions, and the horrid excuse for a storyline is thrown around because of this.
There's my opinion - love it or fuck it.
carlantis25 - August 14, 2009 11:05 AM (GMT)
and the epic begins
Lucius - August 14, 2009 11:50 AM (GMT)
darkray - August 14, 2009 11:51 AM (GMT)
cool very thats a really good thing you got goin there :D
Whitewolf8 - August 14, 2009 12:08 PM (GMT)
Renegade - August 14, 2009 01:55 PM (GMT)
Well, I've went all-out on this one right here.Problem #1 -
Fighters don't just go up to random people and ask to be in a group - especially without proper grammar.Problem #2 -
More grammarless wording and
an answer that was way too straightforward.Problem #3 -
Look at the movement. Huh?!Problem #4 -
Fighters don't just go up to random people and ask to be in a group - especially without proper grammar.Problem #5 -
Mysterious weapon change. Check over your work for mistakes like that.Problem #6 -
Two panels of problems. People don't just stroll up and straight away introduce themselves. There's something before that - like meeting properly.Problem #7 -
Thanks for what? Thanks for proving yourself?
Tygr - August 14, 2009 02:51 PM (GMT)
More confusing stuff and characters with hypersuprapowers O.o
Denning Rosewater - August 14, 2009 11:12 PM (GMT)
There's no need to restate the problems. There's definitely a need for those problems to be addressed, however. If they aren't, then people seriously aren't going to bother reading.
Dark Overlord Zack - August 14, 2009 11:32 PM (GMT)
Renegade - August 15, 2009 06:52 AM (GMT)
Yeah. Less chatter, more bone-grinding and feeding
Sety - August 28, 2009 02:14 AM (GMT)
Aren't comics supposed to be funny? They don't look bad, they just aren't really worth reading <_<
Carlantis07 - February 28, 2010 12:15 PM (GMT)
This marks the New era of Carl's COMIX SO PLEASE I've amped up my vocab and added a spell check. so please bear with the story.
Dark Overbro Zack - February 28, 2010 02:05 PM (GMT)
still doesn't make sense.
DjDjDj - February 28, 2010 10:30 PM (GMT)
Carlantis07 - March 1, 2010 10:45 AM (GMT)
DAuze it will begin to make sence in Chapter 2 which is currentley in production.